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Veins and arteries curl into their own maze
And tangled mess of blood and gore.
Feel your nerves tighten and clasp together
So tight,
So tight you might explode.
See your fingertips gripping the silver tim of the table,
If you loose it now you might crash through the ceiling
Because you can\'t stand without support,
You\'ve always lacked support.
Where were they when you called?
As you lie down your shirt sticks to your back,
It\'s soaked, sweat,
You\'re hot, don\'t close your eyes,
If you close them now you might not wake up.
Just for a second you see a figure,
Is it God, or is it the devil?
There are arrows,
One left and one right,
Which way do you turn?
You know you shouldn\'t have swallowed so many
Of those small crumbly white sweets.
But you were hungry,
Hungry to be with her,
To hold her and smoothe the ends of her hair flat,
To feel her heart beat and her cheeks brush against yours.
You didn\'t want it to be this way,
She\'s lost without you, you\'re lost without her.
Can you hear her calling now?
You begin to shake and the light above flickers,
Faces appear, relatives, people of the past,
Don\'t scream anymore, hush for a while,
You\'ll be with her soon.
She\'s calling you again,
Close your eyes this time.
Can you see her,
She\'s looking for you,
Don\'t keep her waiting.
No one will understand why you took your life,
But she does, and you do.
You\'re together now, that\'s it,
Take her hand, give her a kiss.
Now look down on your mom and dad,
Everyone who loves you.
Look at them crying and shouting.
What\'s wrong?
You\'re OK now, everything\'s going to be alright.
You took your life tonight
And
You
Took
Theirs
Too.
©2003-2009 ~snoopy-dog
:iconsnoopy-dog:

Author's Comments

i have a friend who has a relative who took his life

no one can understand why. neither can she. i feel strongly about what i've written. people who kill themselves not only take their own life but they take away a part of their relatives life.

it cause pain and suffering. leaves despair.

hope when you read this you can understand.

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:iconhellhathnofury:
jennie, i don't know what to say, it's so emotional. It's made me cry. some of this is so, relative. some not so much but it makes the point.
no, I don't think anybody will understand now or in the future.
the name is very powerful. but the poem just hit me, right there. it was over whelming.
megx
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:icond00bie:
Woah.. I'm kinda speechless here. Written with so much emotion, it's so powerful. The ending is perfect, strong way to end this poem.

Well done. Hug

--
We're sown together,
She’s born to mesmerize,
Beside, astride her,
I die inside her.

--Placebo, Space Monkey.
:iconrngeconvrse88:
WOW...I don't know what to say...it's just, well, amazing. I love it because of how emotional it is, the ending is just perfect. You've done it again, just like all the others-you've struck me in the mind and as well as heart. Thankyou is all I can say in repay...along with a +favlove ~_*
Lata,
the S.S.S.B.P.#S#~SC~

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:iconmirva:
This is sad and very touching poem. I dig it.
And you're right too, when you took your own life, you took your relatives lives too. Your poem really made me feel sorry for everyone who has lost a relative or friend like this. And now I feel really guilty about thinking to end my life with my own hands.... I won't anymore.

Go and check my stuff too!

--
I'm walking towards dead end and I'm walking all alone,
Two steps ago I passed insanity.
:iconliquidius:
Its an amazing poem. Enough said really.

+fav
:iconneo-gbuddha:
pain and death ne where effects us immedely. first, the poem is great, the rythum and emotion was all there. the portryal of how sucide effects family was nothing short of amazing.
sucide, isnt a reason to cause more pain, however. some may think they can get back at some one by killing themself, but that gives people a bad name. no, sucide is done to hurt others, or yourself. contray, it is dont to end the suffering your soul has endured. alot of people could never see the reason for sucide, how some one could endure so much pain that they would chose to end it all. well, i know. sometimes the pain comes so strong, and despite all defenses it overruns. it overruns untill you are filled with dispair, and a longing for something far out of ur reach. intangable silence. this type of pain is what causes sucide, and this pain doesnt go away, like so many ppl will aruge. no, this pain stays for your whole life, and you either bury it away and hope for the best, or you can end bad. sadly, when you end the bad, u must also end the good...
srry, i'll stop ranting now

--
How strange it is to be awakened these few insightful moments, and come to find that you mind has already been raped by a god.

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